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First, second or third narrative

First, second or third narrative

I’m writing a novella (which is quickly turning into a full blown novel) and I’ve been having a hard time choosing what narrative to write in. The options are:

First Person: When it’s from the point of view of a character (I did this, we did that).

Second Person: This is the choose your own adventure one (you do this, you do that), this was never an option I was interested in.

Third Person: When it’s an omnipresent voice describing everything (he does this, she does that).

Having only written screenplays before I’ve always written in the third person. I thought it would be fun to write in the first person. If I’m being honest, I will admit I also did it to cover my own writing neurosis. If anyone said it was poorly written I could just say “That’s the character’s voice, not mine.”

The novella I’m writing is a comedy mystery and the genre is butting heads with the first person narrative. For starts, in a mystery you want the murder, or whatever mystery, to happen in the first chapter to hook people in. My character’s don’t get involved in the mystery right away so the suspense is missing from the first chapter. By writing in the third person, I can now set up my mystery and then set up my characters as I like.

Also, when writing for film and TV I try to remember the following quote:

Tragedy is a close-up; comedy, a long shot.”

– Buster Keaton

A situation is funnier when there is a separation between the audience/reader and the character. Being involved in a murder mystery would be pretty intense stuff. So it’s hard to find the humour when the character is talking about how scared they are. In the third person it becomes a silly romp.

Now working on the second draft I feel more comfortable with the story, and my writing, so I feel confident in writing in the third person, using my voice, taking both the praise and the flak for it. 

Let’s see how this turns out…

The Knight and The Dragon

The Knight and The Dragon

The villagers let it be known they were in need of a hero. Wanted, the decree began, one knight to save the princess and slay the dragon.

The Knight heeded the call and traveled on his trusty horse to the village.

“I have arrived,” said the Knight. “What seems to be the problem?”

“It is the dragon,” the Mayor said. “The beast must be fed young maidens or it will destroy the village. It has eaten half the maidens so far. Through lottery the princess has been chosen and will be sent to the lake where the dragon dwells.”

“It told you this I assume.”

“Well… No.” The Mayor’s face crumpled with confusion. “It’s just what dragons do isn’t it.”

“Not necessarily,” the Knight said.

By now the villagers had come to witness, and an audience had grown.

“Listen. are you going to kill the dragon or not?” The Mayor asked abruptly.

“Did you even ask it if it likes the taste of maidens? Have you tried feeding it sheep, or oxen, or pie?”

The villagers muttered amongst themselves. They had not.

“Let us go to the lake now,” the Knight suggested. “We shall bring a pot luck and feast with the beast.”

The villagers cooked and baked and headed to the lake. It was a wonderful party, the dragon came out and sighed with relief. It smiled and flew around with excitement. When the meat went cold the dragon heated it with fire. The dragon even fended off some bears that with were attracted by the food. The children rewarded the dragon by rubbing it’s belly.

A happy arrangement was made, the dragon would protect the village, and the village would feed the dragon.

“Now,” said the Knight, “As reward I wish to take the princess’s hand in marriage.”

“You didn’t do anything,” the Mayor said. And the villagers chased out the Knight as they called him a wimp.

An Invocation… for myself

An Invocation… for myself

I’m making a promise to myself, an invocation. I want to achieve some goals between now and March 31st. When I feel down, or when I just need a kick up an arse, I will watch the embedded Ze Frank video. It works every time.

So here it goes. By March 31st at 7pm I will have achieved the following:

– I will have finished a second draft of my comedy mystery novella. It will be at least 20,000 words long.

I will have sent the 2nd draft to 3 beta readers for notes.

– I will have finished a first draft of the sequel novella. It will also be at least 20,000 words long.

– I will post 7 blog of at least 50 words each (after this one). Ideally one a week.

– I will be able to touch my toes with my hands without bending my knees.

Cold Feet

Cold Feet

January 1st 2008

Spending New Year’s Eve in Budapest seemed like a great idea, and would have been, if I was prepared. My winter clothes consisted of nothing more that a coat and gloves.

When I arrived in show-covered Budapest with aerated trainers on my feet I could see this was a problem. Ever the cheap skate, I decided to push on with the running shoes. After all, it’s just a few days of snow.

On the evening of New Year’s Eve there was many street parties for me and my friend, Nick, to enjoy. I would just keep warm with the mulled wine. That’s how I preferred to stay warm at home. I don’t mean wine, I mean a hot drink. A big cup of tea would warm me from the inside out. My central heating, I called it. I wouldn’t need to pay for heating when I had a kettle and a thick jumper to wear. If any guests complained about the cold I’d give them ‘the guest jumper’.

Looking back, getting drunk on hot booze was not the safest way to stay to warm. Instead of an organised firework display, Budapest had street vendors selling fireworks to anyone. Between mulled wine stands I’d pass by people shoving firework rockets in between the street’s cobbled stones and light them up. I’d try to keep my distance, I avoided the teens with the rockets and headed towards a group of people huddled up and talking. When I got close they group ran leaving behind a firework with a lit fuse. Six feet away from an explosive taking off, I thought about how I’d forgotten to get travel insurance.

On New Year’s Day Nick and I went out to explore the city in four inches of snow at -4 C weather.  My silly trainers with their dynamic air wholes and all that sport science did not serve me at all. My feet were wet and ice-cold. It was too much. Just to keep warm we kept returning to the hostel for ten minutes of warmth before heading back out to the tourist sites. Each time seeing four American girls watching the same rolling news on CNN all day.

The hostel had put out some pork pastries for the guests to eat as eating pork on New Year’s Day is considered good luck. After munching more than my fair share I had an idea; I could stick my shoes in the tumble dryer and in twenty minutes I’d have toasty feet.

I threw the shoes into the hostel’s combo washer-dryer turned the dial to the dry symbol, pressed start, and the drum span. Genius.

As it came to the end of the cycle there was a click noise and everything was still. I tried to open the circular glass door but it wouldn’t release. Then the drum filled with water. The cycle started from the beginning. My shoes were now the wettest they’d ever been.

I tried turning the dial back to dry, but at the end of the cycle it repeated again. At this point I realised it wasn’t a washer-dryer at all. It was a washer and I’d put my shoes to spin. I tried turning it off, I tried unplugging it, but it remained locked. Every time I attempted to skip the cycle it would repeat a new cycle each time.

I waited until right after the click, the point when the cycle was finished to unplug the machine. It was still locked. I pulled at the plastic handle as hard as I could. The thing snapped off and pinged from wall to wall.

“Um, I don’t know what to do.” said Nick, who’d been watching the whole time. I sent Nick out to buy new shoes but all the shops were closed for the holiday.

After deciding my shoes would be released if I let the full cycle happen I sat and read for an hour. Hoping the owner didn’t come by and notice his broken washer. I wondered if the American girls, who probably heard me shouting and swearing at the machine, would tell on me. Then the cycle ended, the washer beeped, and my shoes were free.

My stomach was ready for dinner but any restaurant was a good 15 minute walk in the cold and snow. My feet wouldn’t survive in that. I remembered my dad telling me when he was a child and his shoe’s had wholes he would use plastic bags between two socks to keep his feet dry. The outer pair would get soaked, but the inner pair stayed dry thanks to the plastic.

I looked around for two plastic bags and went to work making my water-proof socks. Me and Nick walked across the bridge to the main street of restaurants with my feet cozy. Once we entered the restaurant I noticed each step I made created a rustle. A loud rustle. I couldn’t hear it outside as the snow and traffic made enough noise to cover.

Headed to the restaurant’s bathroom I’d get strange looks. If I were to see and hear this I would assume the man had plastic underwear and was incontinent. So I assume that’s what others thought. I wanted to point out I was headed to the bathroom, therefore I had urinary control. However, returning to my table was still a walk of shame.

The next morning with my shoes still wet and on a coach to Vienna, I held my shoes against a tiny radiator grill beneath the window seat. By the end of the four-hour drive the gentle warm air had dried my shoes. Although this was inconvenient I did get extra room as no one wanted to sit next to the guy with no shoes. Not even Nick.